- character
- setting
- problem
- solution
Your final draft of your story should have 3 paragraphs: a beginning, middle and an end. Remember the rules for writing a narrative:
- Beginning- Introduce who the characters are and explain their personalities. Explain and describe the setting and where the story takes place.
- Middle- Your problem is developed and explained in this paragraph.
- End- Your characters find the solution to their problems in this paragraph. Explain to the reader how the problem is solved and how your characters feel about the problem being solved.
Remember to type your story and have your parents help you with grammar and spelling. All of the blogs and this final writing assignment are Due Monday, October 6th. Good luck! I can't wait to read your stories!
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A machine that I could invent to make my life easier is a wish machine because then I would have lots of wishes. But then somebody found out about it and wanted a wish. I said no because he was a stranger and probalY was going to wish that he/she had one for his/her own and could tell everybody
and he/she did. oh no! What could i do? Should i tell my mom or should i destroy the wish machine? I know it I will destroy it then ship it off to another country maybe even to the north pole. I destroyed the wish machine and siped it off to the north pole in the ice cream truck can you believe that me Peyton Kreuscher who lives in FLORIDA and I did that could you believe that.Somebody found a piece of the wish machine. The next day the police department called me there and my mom and they wanted to talk to us about the wish machine and I admitted that it was me.they made me clean up the mess and we were over it. I am Peyton Kreuscher I live in Florida and I did all that.WOW!
On Thursday afternoon Chelsey,Annabell,and crystal went to there other friend's house her name was beauty. Her house was bright yellow crystal and Chelsey liked it but me Annabell did not it was almost the shade of lemons I hate lemons. They all had something in command, they all like to advent things. And they just made something they said let's see what it does they tried it out and it happened out to make less time at school,and work how did they know there mom was home and it was only 12:00 when they looked at the clock so they have more time to do stuff which makes there life easer.
The named th machine the less time.
When Wednesday came Chelsey,Annabell,crystal, and beauty have used less time a lot and used it more and more and even more. But when Friday came they went back to beauty's house as normally. We tried it and the more times we used it the more time it made it was rilly bad.
We had to do something but what the time might get out of control
maybe we should take the wires said Annabell no maybe we should hit it and maybe it will work said crystal, no maybe we should let it go and bring it to the dump OK I wish we did not have to do this said beauty but it's the best for all of us. 1 hour later.... OK by time less I'm going to miss you said crystal I will to said Beauty. So it goodbye said everyone
Bye time less said everyone bye
I Wish I could invent a machine that would do my homework, give me money,and do my chores.So when I come home I dont have to do any homework my machine can do it for me.
The reason I want it to do my chores is because I don't feel like doing them.The reason I want it to give me money is because when I want to get icecream I can get it instaed of asking my mom and dad for money.
In Louisiana , where I had just moved to, I was unpacking my boxes and cleaning. I was putting away boxes in a closet and saw a machine and took it out. I saw that it was called the money machine. I wondered what it really did. I took it to show my sister, Jacquelen, who is very smart and loves to figure out how things work. She figured out how to work it. I couldn’t believe it. It was like magic, very exciting! Money everywhere! We decided
to share it with our friends, Dana, who can be really spoiled but is very loyal and Eleni who is very, very ,very nice and giving. They were very excited about it too.
With the money machine, we used it to buy toys, clothes and a new car for Jacquelen. I had always wanted a scooter so I got one for me. It was awesome. We shared the money machine with our friends. They were very excited. We kept our secret for a while but someone found out about it. We were scared. They said they would hurt us so we had to stop using it.
They didn’t hurt us but told us to stop using the money machine until things cooled off. We decided to stop using it and hid the machine in the attic. We were glad things were back to normal and so were our friends. Life went on and we eventually forgot about it. The end.
LESS TIME
by:allison van tilborgh
On Thursday afternoon Chelsey ,Anabelle and Crystal went to their other fiends house. Her name was beauty. Her house was yellow. It had some shimmer to it and had some brown on the inside. Crystal and Chelsey liked it but did not was the shade of lemons I HATE LEMONS! I call Lemon Lovers LL's.
They all had something in common. They all like to invent things! And they just made something now. They said, lets see what it does. They tried it out and they couldn't believe it they have made a machine that made less time! They know that it was making less time because their mom was home and it was only 12:00 when they looked at the time. So they had more time to do stuff and their life is eisier. they called the machine time less.
When Wendsday came Chelsey,Anabelle,Crystal and Beauty had used "Time Less" alot and used it more and more and even more. But when Friday came they went to beautys house as normally. And we tried it that afternooon and it made more time,It was really bad. So it reversed time to make more time.
We had to do something ,but what,time might get out of contol because of time less! relacse, everything will be fine. OK. Maybe we should tire the wires out.NO!!! Maybe we should hit it and it might work.NO WAY!!!! I think we should let it go and bring it to the dump.OK. 1 HOUR LATER....Now that was not worth 9 miles walk but it is butter than prison. So this is good bye Time Less. bye. It was sure fun having that machine. It was indeed.
I would invent a do what I want machine to make life easier.
My characters are me/Patrick,and my sister/Selena.Patrick's personality is cool and lazy Selena is smart and lazy.the setting is at our house.the story takes place in my room.
One day Selena found out about my machine and took it when I was asleep.Selena used my machine so she wouldn't need to do any work.
I find the solution by telling my sister we can both share it and we both were happy about that.
One day I was playing baseball with my friends and my mom kept yelling at me to walk the dogs I yelled back this is a real good game so I dont have time. So when I came inside I was in more trouble and had even more pet chores to do. I had to walk,them feed and give them a bath.
Since I had an old computer I thought it would be cool to make a pet care robot. The only problem was it made my dogs Trixie and Coco freak out. They attcked it,bit it, scrathed it and ran away.
I ended up having to give the robot away to NASA and they even gave me alot of money for it. I bought my dogs all kinds of toys and treats so they know how much I love them and want to take kare of them all by myslef.
One day there was a little girl named Lindsay Brenner. She lived in a town called Sanford, FL. She liked to read and draw, but when it came to blogging she never knew what to write. She would open her laptop in her room, and just stare at the screen.
She had lots of blogging homework, and she didn’t want to get a bad grade. Also, she did not get enough sleep at night. Lindsay decided to invent a blogging machine. Instead of getting bad grades she got A’s since the machine did the work.
When she typed in the questions, the machine would make a ringing sound and show her the answer. She would feel great because it saved her time. Also, she would not have to worry if it was right or wrong. She would already know it was right. Blogging was the biggest part of her homework. She didn’t have to worry when it was due. This made her very happy and she got more sleep at night too.
Do you know how much I love shopping? Well, this year for my birthday my dad made a shopping machine for me.
I asked him to show me how it works. He said type into the computer what you want to have. Then the machine will show you what it has and then makes it for you. It pops out of the bottom when it is done. Then I said that is so cool. I have to tell my best friend Quinn about this.
She loved it and we had the machine make everything for us.
One day we were watching the news and it said that most of the stores are losing money and running out of business. Then I saw people looking around on our yard. It was the FBI! Quinn and I saw that they were talking to my Mom and Dad. They said that they need to look around my house, but mom said no. She will not allow it.
Quinn and I thought of some ways to get rid of the machine so the FBI would not know about the Shopping Machine. We finally decided to burn the machine in the middle of the night so we did.
I guess we will go back to shopping the old fashion way!
The Most Awesomest Webkin Maker Ever
Finally, after years and years of failing, I finally got every thing perfect and it worked, It Really Worked! No more double headed webkins! I felt so good when that webkin Finally came out of the machine right! I made it work in December 14th 2008 in winter. I could not go outside so I worked on it.
One morning Olivia called, I haven’t been to school for the last couple days. She is my best friend, she was just calling to sure I was ok. I told Olivia that I finally made a machine that made webkins. I told her I would make her one, but she had to keep it a secret. The next day I went to school and every one was coming up to me wanting me to make them a webkin, I looked over at Olivia and she just smiled. It was not good. Every one followed me home trying to get a webkin, the line was in from my house to Olivia’s house with is way down the Road.
After all the people were gone, I finally decided that I had to get rid of the machine. Since it was winter I had to find a way to cut a big hole in the lake so I could throw it away. I started to miss the webkin maker. I worked really hard to make it. If I made it again I would never tell anyone about it. On Monday I went back to school and at recess I told Olivia I got rid of it. She wanted to know why? I didn’t give her an answer, we just played and laughed until it was time to go back in to school.
A machine that i could invent to make my life easier is a machine that could do my homework i would use it evry day. And then some one found out and got mad at me he / she tried to follow me to my house but I used another way to my house it was in an alley. The only people i would let know is my friends Kyle and Austin. The problem that i have is that the machine wouldn't work. The machine did not work because I spilt my large Dr. Pepper on it by accident. I tried to solve the problem by getting my parents to help me fix the machine.But it turned out that I was actually asleep.
A machine that I would invent to make my life easier would be a chore machine.But something mysterious happened. One day I got and e-mail from someone. They said they wanted to use my choir machine. So I ran to tell my mom. Then my mom said " YOU have a choir machine?!" I shook my head and said yes.
The next day the police called me. They said " Do you know who sent that e-mail?" "no" i said back. Then my sister came in and said " OK,OK it was me! I admit it!" We asked her why she did it and she said all I wanted to do was use the choir machine. Then I said
how did you find out?" She said " I sneaked in you room." Then I said back "WOW! What a day!"
Time Less
by:Allison
A true story,Thursday February 16th. It all started on Thursday afternoon when Chelsey,Anabelle and Crystal went to there other friends house. Her name was Beauty. Her house was yellow and had a little shimmer to it with some brown on the inside. Chelsey and Anabelle liked it ,but I did not. It was the shade of lemons I HATE LEMONS. In fact I call Lemon Lovers "LL's".
Chelsey,Anabelle,Crystal and Beauty all had something in common. They all like to invent things! They just made something now. They said " Lets try it out and see what it does". They tried it out and they could not believe it! They have created a machine that makes Less Time. They new it was making Less Time because there mom was home and when they looked at the time it was only 12:00. So they had more time to do stuff and their life was easer. They called the machine Time Less.
When Wendsday came Chelsey, Anabelle, Crystal and beauty have used Time Less alot. But when Friday came they went to beautys house as normal. And we tried it that afternoon and it made more time. So it reversed time to make more time. It was rilly bad!
We had to do something but what? Time might get out of control because of time less! Relax,every thing is going to be fine Anabelle said Chelsey."OK".Maybe we should take the wires out said beauty.No. Maybe we should hit it till it works said Crystal.No way. Maybe we should let it go and bring it to the dump said Chelsey.OK. 1 hour later... Now that was not worth 9 miles walk. But it is better than prison. So this is good bye time less. It was sure fun having Time Less. It was indeed.
It was late at night and I was doing my homework when the most unbelievable thing happened. I was in my house at my Mum's computer. I was researching about matter for the school. I saw lights flash up and down outside. Suddenly a green laser beam shot into the computer. My arm holding the mouse started to glow. Then the computer started to talk to me! It talked to me about matter and knew everything you could know. I called it Yoda. Every time I asked a question in my head, I could hear the computer answer.
After the zap I was getting bored a school because I knew everything. Everybody thought I was cheating even my friends, teacher and parents. My friends stopped playing with me! My teacher started giving me F's instead of A's and called my parents. Even worse I took special tests and went to university and couldn’t see my family.
The UFO came back and zapped me again so I couldn’t hear the computer anymore. I threw the computer in the river. Now I am happy to learn like everyone else.
Angel's mom called her inside from playing so she could do her chores. She started to fight with her mom because she had so much laundry to do. So she was send to her room. She thought the best way to get more time to play and less time doing chores is to make a clothes sorting machine. She thought this was a good idea.
Angel got everything she needed to build a clothes sorting machine. When she was finished she pressed the start button and put in her dirty clothes. The machine sorted her clothes for her. All she had to do was carry them to the washing machine. When her closed were done, she put her clean clothes in the sorting maching and it folded and sorted her clean clothes. All she had to do was put them away.
Angel's mom came in her room and was amazed. She asked, "How did you do this so fast!" Angel said, " I created a clothes sorting machine." She decided to surprise her mom and brother by doing their laundry as well. Everyone was happy.
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